My Planet Writing

Create and Describe Your Own Planet -

Description writing task

Term 2 Weeks 5-6

Purpose of this piece of writing is to:

Learning Intentions

I am learning to use language features to make my writing
interesting and engaging for the reader.

I am learning to use topic-specific vocabulary.

I am learning to include Te Reo Māori words in my writing.

I will be successful when I can show….

-I have used some language features to make my writing
interesting and engaging (simile, metaphor, alliteration,
onomatopoeia, rhyme)

-I have carefully chosen some topic specific words to include
in my writing.

-I have used some Te Reo Māori

Focus

We are continuing to look at descriptive writing. This week you are writing a
descriptive piece of writing to promote your imaginary planet. You aim is to
convince people to move to your planet. You want your writing to allow the
reader to be able to imagine what it is like on your planet.

First, we will look at an excerpt of a video describing the moon from the Avatar
movie. Click here to get to video= Pandora.

Second, we will discuss together what you will need in your work to make it
successful and look at how to plan our work. Then you will plan your work and
check with a teacher before you start writing.

Third, do your piece of writing.

Fourth, complete you piece of writing. Remember to proof-read (check spelling
and punctuation) and edit (does it make sense? do you need to change any
sentences?) yourself and with a buddy and fill in your self and
peer-assessment. Check it with a teacher.

My Writing

Kamino

Kamino is a planet made of  kātao (water) in the outer Alex of the
Alex galaxy. If you go to this planet you might get lucky and get
cloned in cloning facilities! You would be allowed to look at the
armies being made. There is a low chance that droid gunship might
attack and that might be bad and a high chance a whole fleet of
droid gunships, tri fighters and vulture droids and droids and
droidekas and that's not so good.  It rains alot but the droids are
waterproof.

To get to my planet you need to be in a spaceship that can enter
hyperspace. When you go in hyperspace you are going faster than
the speed of light. In hyperspace you would be going 299,792
kilometers per second! (I had to get this hyperspace information
from the internet). My planet is 100,000 light years away from earth.
100,000 light years is 9.46073e+17 kilometers.

Kaminoan live on Kamino. They have a long neck, they are very tall,
have long legs and they have long arms. Kaminoan live in cities on
the kātao (water)which are also cloning facilities.

The cities have floaters so that the city doesn’t sink into the ocean.
When one of the floaters breaks then there would be a big evacuation
because the floaters are very very big. There would be lots of people
evacuating the facilities because the facilities can hold 10,000,000
people.

I think that you should go there if you are alright with nearly being
shot by a laser.         By Alex